Hi Michelle! I really like your final project, I can tell you analyzed the story thoroughly and did your research. I also like how your picked the character Mary Ann because you are right, she is a relatable character for many people. Even though there might be a lot of people in the city, does not necessarily mean they grew up there, especially in San Francisco that is not only huge but loud. San Francisco can not only be huge and loud, but intimidating as well to a lot of people like Mary Ann. One small thing I want to point out. I am not sure if this is a typo or not; “she becomes doubtful or herself and the city”. I think you meant to out “of” haha! No biggie! Anywho, great job on your final project, really enjoyed how in-depth you went for this character, yay!
Hi Michelle! I can tell you really read this story thoroughly and have a great understanding of the story line and how moving to the city can effect a person. I think this liberation she experiences can happen to a lot of people, and I was wondering if you have a personal story that you could relate to this book? That would be a great addition to the project to give it a personal touch. With the switching back and fourth between characters, why do you think that is? maybe to emphasize the large population of the city and it's diverse peoples perspectives, or maybe just for entertainment purposes. I'm excited to see you revisions!
Hi Michelle, I loved your intro. I thought that you did a fantastic job with describing the story and it's dynamics. I would have had such a hard time describing how the author wrote and the different perspectives. I love the clarity of this quote of yours "told entirely by a rotating first person point of view. Every chapter is a different character’s view..." Nicely done! I also like how your ideas "drive" the essay. You did not simply summarize the book. The third paragraph where you talk about her being relatable, I think that perhaps you may need to straight up call out how relatable she is, or perhaps change the opening sentence of that paragraph since I think you may have gone in a different direction, like with how she changed throughout the book, or that she was naive. Please pardon me as I have not read this book, so I may be interpreting things differently. It sounds like a really interesting read though! I love how you included so many quotes to support your thoughts too!! Awesome essay!
Hi Michelle, I found this topic to be one of the most difficult that I’ve tried to interpret this semester. We all have our ideas on how or why the author may feel about a female character, but providing actual back up proved to be a little tricky for me. You mention that there aren’t any direct opinions or views that the author directly states about any of the characters, but are there any quotes that you can provide that the readers can interpret the language, as you did? I really liked the brief summaries of how other characters in the story depict Mary Ann’s character. You conclusion sounds on point with how she’s meant to be relatable to many women or even men. Although I’ve never read the story, the summaries about how her attitude was influenced by other people is very similar to how many people act and react in real life. Thanks for sharing.
Hi Michelle, thanks for sharing your final project submission! I really liked your project; I have read a lot of projects using this topic (and have written one myself) and find this one to be my favorite. This story sounded very dramatic, and the way you wrote supported that drama. You also did a great job of really focusing in on what the prompt was asking. You were able to convey what Mary Ann though of herself, as well as what you and other characters thought of her. I know you mentioned that it was troubling to focus in on what the author thought about her, but you were creative in your answer and I think it served its purpose. I like how you said that "Mary Ann plays the proxy for Maupin" because it highlights how authors use characters to tell their stories. Great project to end the semester!
Hi Michelle, Great ob with your final project submission. The organization throughout your project was fantastic and you really did a great job of analyzing the character Mary Ann. I had no problem finding your thesis and also figuring out what you were writing about in your paper (ignoring the top part). Your story sounds very entertaining and sounds like it was full of drama. I wish I could say the same about mine. >_<. What I liked most about your project was how you clearly showed how the other characters interacted with Mary Ann. And not only that, but you also provided great evidence to prove your points. Very well done! -Patrick
Hi Michelle! I'm very happy to see how your revisions came out! I think this essay is both entertaining and well thought out. I love the clarity of this quote of yours "told entirely by a rotating first person point of view. Every chapter is a different character’s view..." and also your interpretations of characters and what they mean to the story. I think you did a great job of making everything clear and laid out for the reader. Thank you for sharing your great submission!
Hi Michelle!
ReplyDeleteI really like your final project, I can tell you analyzed the story thoroughly and did your research. I also like how your picked the character Mary Ann because you are right, she is a relatable character for many people. Even though there might be a lot of people in the city, does not necessarily mean they grew up there, especially in San Francisco that is not only huge but loud. San Francisco can not only be huge and loud, but intimidating as well to a lot of people like Mary Ann.
One small thing I want to point out. I am not sure if this is a typo or not; “she becomes doubtful or herself and the city”. I think you meant to out “of” haha! No biggie! Anywho, great job on your final project, really enjoyed how in-depth you went for this character, yay!
Hi Michelle!
ReplyDeleteI can tell you really read this story thoroughly and have a great understanding of the story line and how moving to the city can effect a person. I think this liberation she experiences can happen to a lot of people, and I was wondering if you have a personal story that you could relate to this book? That would be a great addition to the project to give it a personal touch. With the switching back and fourth between characters, why do you think that is? maybe to emphasize the large population of the city and it's diverse peoples perspectives, or maybe just for entertainment purposes. I'm excited to see you revisions!
Hi Michelle, I loved your intro. I thought that you did a fantastic job with describing the story and it's dynamics. I would have had such a hard time describing how the author wrote and the different perspectives. I love the clarity of this quote of yours "told entirely by a rotating first person point of view. Every chapter is a different character’s view..." Nicely done! I also like how your ideas "drive" the essay. You did not simply summarize the book. The third paragraph where you talk about her being relatable, I think that perhaps you may need to straight up call out how relatable she is, or perhaps change the opening sentence of that paragraph since I think you may have gone in a different direction, like with how she changed throughout the book, or that she was naive. Please pardon me as I have not read this book, so I may be interpreting things differently. It sounds like a really interesting read though! I love how you included so many quotes to support your thoughts too!! Awesome essay!
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ReplyDeleteI found this topic to be one of the most difficult that I’ve tried to interpret this semester. We all have our ideas on how or why the author may feel about a female character, but providing actual back up proved to be a little tricky for me. You mention that there aren’t any direct opinions or views that the author directly states about any of the characters, but are there any quotes that you can provide that the readers can interpret the language, as you did? I really liked the brief summaries of how other characters in the story depict Mary Ann’s character. You conclusion sounds on point with how she’s meant to be relatable to many women or even men. Although I’ve never read the story, the summaries about how her attitude was influenced by other people is very similar to how many people act and react in real life. Thanks for sharing.
Hi Michelle, thanks for sharing your final project submission! I really liked your project; I have read a lot of projects using this topic (and have written one myself) and find this one to be my favorite. This story sounded very dramatic, and the way you wrote supported that drama. You also did a great job of really focusing in on what the prompt was asking. You were able to convey what Mary Ann though of herself, as well as what you and other characters thought of her. I know you mentioned that it was troubling to focus in on what the author thought about her, but you were creative in your answer and I think it served its purpose. I like how you said that "Mary Ann plays the proxy for Maupin" because it highlights how authors use characters to tell their stories. Great project to end the semester!
ReplyDeleteHi Michelle,
ReplyDeleteGreat ob with your final project submission. The organization throughout your project was fantastic and you really did a great job of analyzing the character Mary Ann. I had no problem finding your thesis and also figuring out what you were writing about in your paper (ignoring the top part). Your story sounds very entertaining and sounds like it was full of drama. I wish I could say the same about mine. >_<. What I liked most about your project was how you clearly showed how the other characters interacted with Mary Ann. And not only that, but you also provided great evidence to prove your points. Very well done!
-Patrick
Hi Michelle! I'm very happy to see how your revisions came out! I think this essay is both entertaining and well thought out. I love the clarity of this quote of yours "told entirely by a rotating first person point of view. Every chapter is a different character’s view..." and also your interpretations of characters and what they mean to the story. I think you did a great job of making everything clear and laid out for the reader. Thank you for sharing your great submission!
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